BEFORE WE BUMP INTO CAMELS AT THE PALACE


 

BEFORE CRITTERS MEET KINGS AT PALACE

 

Now we must stop to catch our wits

Now we sit to clutch feet

Now we smell camel snorts in bits

Now we link ears and noses and single eye entreat

Now we push each new starry spark in fits

Now we stop, we wonder, we fear East to meet.

 

But what is this gilded domed scaffed place

where we smell in hearing over one eye in maze

but for stalking guarded gate we could pace

where some whisper whistle seeks to gaze

but little while on New King, O Old King crace

where snaking fingers point to sword amaze.

 

Best we should go on another way still east

Lest guarded snaky fingers creep on nosey

Best we should sway into sun away from stable least

Lest ears flop back and eye roll up seem cozy

Best bumbly on littley nooning middley with beast

Lest west crown trick east crowns in dozey.

 

No, no, no go back

yes,yes yes go on

No,no,no show alley back

yes,yes,yes,crawl on

No,no,no give stable track

yes,yes,yes press on

 

Leave stable in west

Tell in starlight into east

Leave young child in west

Tell in soulquest into east

Leave child to carpenter best

Tell no herod no more rest

 

So star teaches friends of danger

So wise east men teaches at manger

So carpenter teaches Egypt to mother

So critters as one teaches each other

So leaning folk keening folk face the road

So telling, knelling, felling folk bear the load.

 

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44 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. nightshade130
    Jan 06, 2012 @ 20:52:54

    I love your way with words Granbee. Very creative πŸ˜€ made me *smile* today πŸ˜€

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 02:57:12

      nightshade, you are such a dedicated sister, I am most humbly grateful that you enjoy these words. Anytime a word of mine makes someone smile, I know I have worked for the Kingdom!

  2. creatingreciprocity
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 03:27:17

    I love the last verse particularly. So succinct.

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 03:30:37

      Thank you so very much, creatingrep! I tried my best to make that last verse a true wrap-up of the predicament our friends find themselves in at this point in the narrative. Apparently, I mostly succeeded. Hooray!

  3. totsymae1011
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 04:09:30

    “Now we smell camel snorts in bits”

    You have a light and playful way of conveying a pretty heavy message. Love the quote above. Nobody can pull this off but you in the way you do it. I can see a little book of verses told Granbee style, with children and grown folk surrounding you with eagerness to hear another witty tale.

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 04:18:15

      Tots, thank you for deciding to “follow” me! Also, I thank you for your perception in seeing the “light and playful way of conveying a pretty heavy message.” My grandmothers always told me, “Medicine goes down a lot better with a spoon of honey afterwards” (but I actually preferred my mother’s homemade blackberry jam!) The Holy Spirit continues to instruct me that if I hope to reach even a few members of other faith communities and varied ethniticites around the world with my pleas to connect to serve all the other folks, I must keep a light, playful touch. You DO know God laughs all the time at us bonky ones down here, right?

  4. Caddo Veil
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 07:07:58

    I really really love the last stanza, especially the last 2 lines!!! Excellent.

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:06:21

      Thanks so much, Caddo. I would have guessed those last two lines would pull you in! That last stanza is written as synopsis and invitation.

  5. Raven of Leyla
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 07:14:32

    Hello I am Raven of Leyla,
    I am pleased to meet you and glad you for the add πŸ˜€
    I shall return soon. You have touched my interest. πŸ˜‰

    Know that you are WELCOME to stop by Ravenwood any time.
    Have a great weekend,
    Raven

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:07:20

      Welcome, welcome, dear Raven. How thrilling it is to “touch” another soul over the internet! I am definitely keeping up with your posts as they appear!

  6. poeticjourney
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 07:51:01

    Another beautiful peice from you Granbee. I love your unique style how you pull us in and get us all hook. I have been on your page all day and havent had the chance to come read till now. God Bless πŸ™‚

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:09:05

      journey, how wonderful that you feel “hooked” to stay with this journey of the critters and unfolk and so many others joining along the way. I feel so blessed to have you as a follower.

  7. cottonbombs
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 12:59:22

    Rose! Yes, we are in in this life together and we all must make an effort to help each other. I’ve never read it in such style as yours and that is what makes you you. Thank you for being you,

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:10:30

      Peter, so glad to be joined with you on this journey. Yes, I am just bonkerly, critterly ME. And you know what, God LOVES me! Go figure! So glad you are willing to put up with me and join with us bonkerly ones on this journey!

  8. lscotthoughts
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 13:43:28

    This is amazing and the last verse is a perfect way of ending the journey, esp.facing the road and bearing the load! I can’t come up with another descriptive complement right now, but all of these are simply entertaining in the most delightful way! Blessings to you! πŸ™‚

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:11:50

      Lauren, lauren, this is NOT the end of the journey–we have barely begun. Stay tuned, dear girl–you ain’t seen NOTHIN’ yet! So glad you are enjoying this bonkerly, critterly posts! Bless you, dearest Lauren!

  9. contemplativemoorings
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 16:58:45

    Very adroit wordplay…I ennjoyed πŸ™‚

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:13:34

      contemplate, I love you saying “adroit”–implies clever and playful movement. We shall endeavor to remember this mood and tone as we move on through rocks and thorns, yet overflown by birdsong and unexpected messengers and tour guides!

  10. Savira
    Jan 07, 2012 @ 22:20:05

    Oh granbee I hope I don’t sound silly but every time I come I am stumped… you speak of the self in a most interesting way… that you leave me confused at first then slowly i begin to understand….

    • granbee
      Jan 07, 2012 @ 23:14:51

      Hey, Savira–join good company in at first being confused, then slowly comprehending and journeying on! That is exactly my own experience as I sit at the keyboard during posting on my blog!

  11. claudia
    Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:21:21

    this is really cool..love how you tell the story from such a creative perspective and pull us right into the scene..much enjoyed..

    • granbee
      Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:33:05

      Thank you so much for this kind feedback, Claudia! I am so glad you were “pulled in” to join us bonky critters on our journey. Enjoyed your latest post on your blog, which I am now following happily.

  12. Jen C Hay
    Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:33:58

    I love this! The last stanza especially! I love that even after I’ve read your work half a dozen times I still get something new from it!

    • granbee
      Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:38:13

      Oh, your words are like nectar to a bee, jenchay! Your feedback here tells me I am mostly succeeding in my goal to write in such a way that draws folks back again and again and each time unfurls yet another petel to reveal another cell of nectar on which to feed their souls!

  13. mjray926
    Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:38:40

    Granbee – I didn’t realize I wasn’t following this blog! You’ve got some excellent stuff here, I’m gonna stick around. Thanks for being such an encouragement on NovJ! πŸ™‚

    • granbee
      Jan 08, 2012 @ 04:42:02

      MJ, I also have missed several new posts on blog I though I was following due to glitches or late-night mis-clicks: that is how it is with us bonkerly critters sometimes, you know! Glad you found me again. I really appreciate the feedback. I always enjoy and learn at the feet of your posts, MJ!

      • mjray926
        Jan 08, 2012 @ 05:52:59

        Thank you! Plus, I also got your message in my “contact me” page. I apologize for the glitches! I’m not sure what exaclty is going on with it all, but know that if this persists in the future, I can easily recieve your messages via “contact me” like you’ve been doing. Thank you for your kind words on my post, My Dying Breath! They were so very uplifting! πŸ™‚ Have a great rest of the day!

        • granbee
          Jan 08, 2012 @ 06:07:45

          MJ, I would report this problem to wordpress if I were you. Anyway, glad you received the commentary of mine on My Last Breath. I was disappointed to post in “contact me” as I had wanted all other followers to see how highly I thought of this poem. It truly was one of your best I have read since finding your blog last autumn. May the Lord bless you and keep you, may He make His contenance to shine upon you and be gracious unto you, dear MJ.

  14. Betty Hayes Albright
    Jan 09, 2012 @ 03:22:05

    Granbee, I enjoyed this one a lot, and especially the last stanza – and like Caddo, those last two lines! Lovely creature-ly loverly story!

    • granbee
      Jan 10, 2012 @ 01:15:49

      Thank you so much,Betty! Hooray for the apparent success of those last two lines. I am working hard to end my posts with similar success with this type of “wrap-up” that punches into our psyches!

  15. zumpoems
    Jan 09, 2012 @ 04:36:59

    Love how you ended this and brought this together. Excellent Christmas poem with a serious message.

    • granbee
      Jan 10, 2012 @ 01:17:15

      Zum, we are continuing with this “Christmas” message that the Babe wants us to “go tell”. So glad you enjoyed this poem. As you have seen, those last line must be doing their job pretty well. I will continue to end my posts with a “punch”, okay?

  16. Angela
    Jan 09, 2012 @ 07:02:59

    You never cease to delight!! This, for some reason, is my favourite stanza:

    No, no, no go back
    yes,yes yes go on
    No,no,no show alley back
    yes,yes,yes,crawl on
    No,no,no give stable track
    yes,yes,yes press on

    I just love it; I felt that this was the fulcrum upon which the poem pivoted, and hence your wonderful story. – Okay, that was my reason for liking it (I knew I’d get it eventually, it was waiting in my unconscious :-)).

    • granbee
      Jan 10, 2012 @ 01:20:03

      Oh, Angela, I am MORE than pleased that the lines your quoted were your favorite stanza here. While I was writing them, I was a little child -critter once again, seesawing back and forth on what I needed to do next! We bonkerly critters disagree on surface tactics, but end up in mutually supportive connections that enable us to travel together on our journeys. You are so correct–this was the fulcrum of much of this entire series. It is also a very strong clue to many other incidents to come.

  17. Jen C Hay
    Jan 10, 2012 @ 03:20:50

    Hi! I nominated you for the Versatile Blogger award. I know you’ve probably been nominated a thousand times, so feel free to ignore it. Details are here (If I manage to pull off a miracle and get technology to work for me. I doubt it.) : http://jenchay.wordpress.com/2012/01/09/the-versatile-blogger-award/
    Jen x

    • granbee
      Jan 10, 2012 @ 04:10:53

      Jen, I bow in humble gratitude to your nominatin. However, as many of my followers already know, I am so deep into work on my adult fairytale series of books with my own illustrations (which never, ever leave my conciousness) that I reget being unable to perform the to-do list accompanying these wonderful award nominations. I am so pleased to have you as a follower and thoroughly enjoy your blog! Bless you, dear JenC

  18. eof737
    Jan 12, 2012 @ 05:54:37

    Brought back memories of the camels I saw at the zoo… idling away in the summer sun. πŸ˜‰

    • granbee
      Jan 13, 2012 @ 03:46:45

      eof, bringing back to memories, actuall hearing, seeing, and smelling the camels is one of things I hope to achieve in this post, to prepare us for what lies ahead on our friends’ journey.

  19. bardessdmdenton
    Jan 13, 2012 @ 01:35:55

    All the wonderous ‘dilemnas’ of traveling life are here…no, yes, no, go back, go on, crawl on (I love ‘crawl’!), yes!yes!yes! press on…

    And the last stanza can so stand on its own…to teach us to follow that star leading us to the heart of destiny.

    • granbee
      Jan 13, 2012 @ 03:48:45

      Thank you bardess for all these insightful remarks, but especially thanks for your inter-faith way of seeing these spiritual challenges and quests. This is where I am going with my goals to connect all sorts of people and include them on this journey. Yes, I also loved the “crawling” action, for that is how we get through many days in our spirits.

  20. willofheart
    Jan 13, 2012 @ 08:41:37

    this is awesome I love the creativity from each lines and the last part really strikes on me….

    • granbee
      Jan 14, 2012 @ 04:47:36

      Thank you so much, willo! I always strive to make the last lines the most memorable ones! I am so pleased I have succeeded with you! So glad to have found you out here in writers’ blogland!

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