SEEING A BRIGHTER LIGHT BEYOND A TANGLED DARK VALE


 

SEE THAT BETTER LIGHT OUT YONDER?

 

Heaving and breathing and cleaving and leaving

the beds of night for the far-hanging ledges

Shoving and scuffing and cuffing and shreveing

the arms and legs on the way of pledges

 

No wondering no plundering no blinking or shrinking

each friend somehow anyhow leaned and keened there

Not never not clever to scope more journey in thinking

each pain each gain tossed far behind the past to snare

 

Oh me oh my oh sigh oh nigh to nouncing finish line

while unknown Old Crow flapped in calling new sight

Old Crow scolding the molding of quest thought fine

Old Crow skewing eye to far far peak holding true light

 

Oh bother oh brother oh mother oh no more cover

Oh no oh so oh do-si-do inshiver inquiver at far peak

Oh friends oh trends oh mends of mind to seek far lover

Of all our souls in tolls of Crow across black tangly creek

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46 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. totsymae1011
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:03:48

    A nice, happy rhythm to this, Granbee. Felt like it read, ‘Over the river and through the woods to Granbee’s house we go…” Yours, just as magical and gay (gay as in what it used to mean way back when, of course). Nice…

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:08:05

      Tots, leave it to YOU to find gaity in facing yet another dark, tangled valley to be crossed to reach an even further,higher lighted place of quest! So pleased to have your ever-happy spirit with us on this journey.

  2. willowdot21
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:03:53

    Oh listen I do and listen I will though frightened I am of the critters cresting the Hill. The shadow of crow makes me feel safe. Keep us all safe xxxxx

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:10:33

      Wow, willowdot, I honestly had not though the overflying crow would make travelers feel safe. I can see you are right! Having such a far seeing guide to sort of lead the way would be comforting. Now these critters can be quite a handful to travel with but they never allow for any boredom, do they?

  3. worshipandswag
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:09:33

    Sick rhymes granbee! Awesome 😀

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:11:40

      Yep, the rhymes do set the tone of more difficult travels yet ahead before the next goal is reached! Glad you saw them this way! Thanks for your ongoing encouragement and support, dear one.

  4. cottonbombs
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 06:32:37

    Rose! This is very much the sight of light as it reflects upon our souls. We are always reaching out for new lands, new worlds and new light. Keep shining yours her, Rose. You attract far off travelers to your warm shores.

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:02:20

      Peter, you soft bomber, you! Such flattery will get you warmed up and brightened up! Yes, if we are remotely “normal” human beans (as my mawmaw used to say), we do always want brighter light in our lives. We know we often have to go to new places, at least inside ourselves, to find this light. Thank you for your ongoing support and encouragement.

  5. writinggomer
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 08:33:24

    See that Jesus over yonder, you know, over the hill, through the dark woods, out of the valley shrouded in shadow…where the evil lurks to snare us with dread. Yeah….that Jesus…waiting for us to call.
    Blessings to you granbee! 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:03:34

      EXACTLY, writinggomer! He calls us to walk through many dark, tangled places in order that we can mirror back His light into those shadowed hearts!

  6. Betty Hayes Albright
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 09:51:20

    This is wonderful to read aloud!

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:04:28

      Betty, so pleased you thought of reading this aloud, for that is definitely the way I imagine most people discovering more light through this series.

  7. Vampire Weather
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 11:49:35

    From the title on I am caught in the magic of your talented writing

    “Oh me oh my oh sigh oh nigh to nouncing finish line

    while unknown Old Crow flapped in calling new sight

    Old Crow scolding the molding of quest thought fine

    Old Crow skewing eye to far far peak holding true light”

    There are just no words to describe the magic of how you call up metaphors and symbolism with ease and paint such grand achievements. Wonderfully done

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:05:51

      VW, I don’t know about the “ease” part, for I walk, breathe, drink and eat this stuff these days! Thank you for your extremely gracious support and encouragement. So pleased you are enjoying traveling with us critters!

  8. 10eveningflowers
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 13:56:21

    this is a beautiful piece….it rhymes so well 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:06:55

      Bless, dear 10eveningflowers, for your support of my rhyming schemes! Very glad to have you enjoying the journey with us.

  9. mtsweat
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 17:55:29

    Great message from the trials of travel through life’s journey, granbee. Thanks for sharing this amazing talent of yours. God bless, good friend.

  10. Grandfathersky
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 20:02:29

    Classic form from Edger Allen Poe to Winnie the Pooh! This is a magical spell, reading it changes my mind …. great work, thanks -gs

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:09:07

      Grandfather, changing minds around the world is my constant prayer for this series. You have made my current poetic “era” with your feedback here today. Bless you always. Glad to have you with us critters on this quest.

  11. Author of Christian Comfort & Conversation
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 21:38:53

    Granbee, you have such a way with words and bringing them together. It is like speaking a foreign language that speaks to my heart and uplift my soul. This one speaks to me, of a sinner finding the light (Christ) out of darkness after kicking and scrappling with darkness. No more protection from mother but one must look further yonder for their lover for comfort and protection. For a higher being (God).

    I love this one….

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:10:35

      My dear sister in the Lord, bless you and thank you SO MUCH for your wonderful support, encouragement and endorsement of this message. I use this type of language to reach the largest number of fellow humans around the world.

  12. journeyintopoetry
    Feb 09, 2012 @ 22:32:55

    I love this part granbee!

    I felt quite healthily breathless at the end! 🙂

    New light is to be sought after.

    Christine

    • granbee
      Feb 09, 2012 @ 23:12:13

      Christine, so pleased, no–so ecstatic!!!–to hear of your healthy feelings after reading this post. Hooray and hooray! Yes, we must be seeking new light always, for we critters need it so much to bring us out of the shadows.

  13. Sarah Baughman
    Feb 10, 2012 @ 05:39:00

    What a rhythm this piece has! I could dance to it.

    • granbee
      Feb 10, 2012 @ 05:50:05

      Dance with your two-year-old, Sarah! Bless you for feeling this way about the rhythms in this piece. I am finding that development of rhythmical patterns in my poetry is ever more of a joy for me.

  14. Sue Dreamwalker
    Feb 10, 2012 @ 21:51:38

    The Magic of words created in vision here Granbee is Divine 🙂 in every sense..
    You share a world of unimaginable delight as you weave your tale.. I see Crow a squawking and flapping and Vampire Weather picked out the exact verse I would have done.. Keep lighting up our trails as we journey across uncharted waters Granbee.. As we set our sails to brighter waters xx

    • granbee
      Feb 11, 2012 @ 00:19:21

      Oh, Sue, we MUST journey to brighter waters, brighter lands, if we are ever to find the Rainbow of Promise that will point to enough spiritual gold (The Golden Mean, you know) on which to polish our souls to keep proper company with The Creator! So pleased you enjoyed Crow’s sqawking and flapping. I, too, enjoy how crows see and tell! Thank you so much for your ongoining participation in our journey here.

  15. jenx67
    Feb 11, 2012 @ 00:46:02

    I want to live in a world where poets like this are millionaire celebrities and vulture capitalists are food for buzzards.

    • granbee
      Feb 11, 2012 @ 00:48:38

      WOW, Jen!!!! From your lips to God’s ears! You have SUCH a wonderful way of affirming this ol’ Boomer lady! Thank you and blessings on you all over the place!

  16. zumpoems
    Feb 11, 2012 @ 06:41:16

    Love the rhythmic shifts and the rhymes that stream in from all direction. For me sometimes the musicality of the poem is sometimes enough in itself, but the meaning of dark against light, and pursuing a better life against the darker existence of push comes to shove knits itself in very nicely to the structure and musical tension and release. Wonderfully done!

    • granbee
      Feb 11, 2012 @ 22:45:24

      Zummy, what a wonderfully thorough and thoughtful commentary on this poem. Thank you so much for your time and care with this comment. Bless you for your ongoing encourgement and support here.

  17. Jane Thorne
    Feb 11, 2012 @ 18:33:32

    Thank you for sharing your light Rose xx

  18. Fergiemoto
    Feb 15, 2012 @ 05:28:52

    Quite a nice rhythm…oh how it flows so well!

    • granbee
      Feb 16, 2012 @ 02:05:11

      Fergie, thank you so very much. So pleased you enjoyed the flow and the rhythms, for those elements are very essential to the progress of our critterlyfolks’ journey here!

  19. Joyce de vivre
    Feb 15, 2012 @ 22:11:41

    Hi Granbee, thank you for sharing your ”word wonders” 🙂 Your write-ups are always with God behind and I love that brighter light 🙂 Thank you also for always praying for me and my family, we are safe in God’s hands though we are praying for the affected families in our sister city and for the lives lost. I missed a lot here and can’t help to stay with a cup of coffee 😀 Thanks for always being an encourager and a friend from the Lord! God bless 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 16, 2012 @ 02:07:26

      Joyce, how very gracious of you to take time to enter such perceptive and supportive comments here! Yes, we continue to pray for those affected in the Phillipines and for your work in ministry there. Yes, my critterlyfolk always travel knowing that God “has their back”, shinining His light ahead of them always! For the Babe told them so with just His loving eyes!

  20. lscotthoughts
    Feb 16, 2012 @ 08:10:08

    A magical, mysterious journey, searching for the light, Rose…oh how I’ve missed your enchanting language~I agree with others, your rhythm and rhyme is wonderful, again~ 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 16, 2012 @ 23:43:41

      Bless you dear Lauren! I have really missed your visits here! Yes, the rhymes and rhythms are essential to reflect the attitudes of our critterfolks (who reflect US!) as they journey in quest of brighter and brighter light!

  21. bardessdmdenton
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 04:28:57

    ‘No wondering no plundering no blinking or shrinking
    each friend somehow anyhow leaned and keened there’

    Sound like a wonderful support system, Granbee. Something like the journey all us connecting creative and sensitive blogging souls are sharing!

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:01:59

      EXACTLY, bardess, dear bardess! We cannot continue our quest for more light without each other, I believe! So pleased you particularly picked up on those lines which still ring in my head when I am with friends in the flesh!

  22. eof737
    Feb 20, 2012 @ 13:39:49

    May we all glimpse that light beyond the tangled mess… 😉

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:03:11

      Yes, eof737, the quest for the One Light, the brightest light, IS beyond the tangled mess of this day-to-day world. WE MUST pull each other up to stand fully in that light!

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