BREAKING OUT OF THE BRAMBLES


 

 

 

                                                                                                                                                                                            

This will be a very short poem today to continue with our friends on their journey questing for the brightest possible light.

Please keep in mind all the previous reblogged posts of this date as their messages play into our friends journey.

UNTANGLING LIGHT FROM SHADOW WITH BIRDLY CHIRPS

Scrumbling and tumbling and mumbling and pumbling

over toe over slow over head over heel

all tied gether friends did land in fumbling

away more shadows tore platters of pain to feel

Scarced ceasing in mudflat buried Flopear

saving friends from going over edge

just then quirking ear to song in stop! hear!

saving bird chirp so rasped in hedge

“By here, by now, my beady eye did spark”

called out Ugly Bird to mark

With sharp glinting bead of eye lark

beamed tiny pointer out from tangle so stark.

NOTE:  Please stay tuned for the trip out of this morass!

 

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42 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. totsymae1011
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 09:21:17

    You’ve got my tongue and my brain twisting with this one.
    I’d like to get a visual of those sparkling beady eyes. 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:33:35

      See, Tots, the beady eyes were normally seen as “ugly”, but are now, just at this point in time and place, very essential to reflect just a tiny splinter of light to guide our friends out of the brambles! Whenever I tangle YOUR tongue, Tots, I know I have been very successful at the jabberwocky thing!

  2. Grandfathersky
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 10:57:45

    Whew! Got me tongue tied .

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:34:54

      Great about you being tongue-tied, grandgather. This is a large part of the point, that these critters (much more like all of us than we would like to think!) cannot talk or reason their way out of these brambles. THEIR tongues are tied, as it were!

  3. claudia
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 13:28:11

    smiles…will def. stay tuned…love the journey you’re taking us on…and we def. need friends that stop us from going over edge…

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:35:55

      Claudia, thanks so much for your ongoing support here. Yes, we gotta have friends to help us and we gotta be able to recognize us, even when they show up as beady-eyed, ugly birds!

  4. cottonbombs
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 14:06:28

    Rose! It just takes one strong voice to lead the rest out of darkness. Keep shouting, we’re listening.

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:37:08

      Peter, this ol’ “ugly bird” lady will be screeching and sqwawking pretty soon! Thanks SO MUCH for your constant support and encouragement in this journey of ours!

  5. Julie Catherine
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 15:08:19

    Granbee, I just love your wordplay – it’s unique and it’s delightful! I eagerly await what is to follow …. ~ Julie 🙂

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:38:23

      JulieCath, so pleased you are enjoying the wordplay! See, normal conversation and normal methods of reasoning just don’t work in these situations our critterlyfolk find themselves falling into on their quest.

  6. Linda Willows
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 20:40:34

    This is like another language entirely! Must be read aloud! I loved it and too clever for its own singing words! Great, granbee! love, Linda

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:39:21

      Bless you, Linda, for enjoying these words read aloud! The actual auditory sounds mimic what is going on inside these dear critters hearts and souls!

  7. willofheart
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 21:23:30

    I miss this, I love it as always… 🙂

  8. Sue Dreamwalker
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 21:41:54

    ” All tied together friends did land in a fumbling” Love that line Granbee…
    I reckon that there are many all tied together at this moment all fumbling in the darkness.. But I know those critters will jump and squawk and chirp and roar, until we Sit up and take notice!..
    Im sitting up Granbee… and Im already upon the Ark.. 🙂 Love to you my light-spreading friend xx ~Blessing to you xx ~Sue

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:41:32

      Bless you, dear thoughtful, wise Sue! You are such a constant source of support and inspiration. Yes, we need to pay closed attention to the noises and antics of these critters, because they are US!

  9. VIKRAM ROY
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 22:16:59

    I think “Ugly” is not a good word in a poem, btw the poem is sounds musical! Nice!

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:43:13

      Vikram, I really debated about calling the bird “ugly”, but I finally decided on this term simply because it makes us all sit up and empathize with the bird and his function in helping these tumbing critters in the brambles by using his beady eye to reflect just enough light onto their path to come them up out of this place. So pleased you enjoyed the poem overall. Thank you!

  10. willowdot21
    Feb 17, 2012 @ 23:23:39

    “”With sharp glinting bead of eye lark” Yes and now the lark has joined the crow in watching over our tumbly fumbly peocreaturepuls!

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 04:44:41

      willowdot, you are priceless! Your whimsy has been a constant inspiration to me. This beady eye actually performs a lark of a deed for our entangled friends!

  11. lscotthoughts
    Feb 18, 2012 @ 08:42:51

    Again, magically, delightful and yes, I’m tongue-tied, too! My family has also been entertained occasionally, as I read your enchanting words out loud! 🙂 I’m patiently awaiting the next trip! xx

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 23:34:41

      I say, Hooray, when you followers report being “tongue-tied” by these lines! See, it is human words that tie us up so often; and I want these lines to reflect that truth, among many other truths! So glad you can entertain your family with these lines. Hopefully, the publishers and movie folks will see this same potential in this series; ha! Next, we will be “lifted” up the next steep slope with help from some very unlikely “vultures”, no less!

  12. Christine Moran
    Feb 18, 2012 @ 17:35:40

    I am still very much with you on this journey of yours granbee – always count me in!!

    Christine x

    PS Can I bring Jack with me?? (Four legged friend of creaminess!)

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 23:36:14

      Christine, Jack would be a MOST welcome addition to our crew. I am confident that he will have a much more accurate sense of the trustworthiness of unlikely creatures that show up to help our critterfolks up the next steep slope!

  13. Christine Moran
    Feb 18, 2012 @ 23:41:04

    He is very pleased to hear that and is smiling broadly as I type!! 🙂

    xx

    • granbee
      Feb 18, 2012 @ 23:59:59

      Well, if I have pleased Jack, then I need worry not about pleasing all the rest of you guys out there in this wonderful blogging community of ours, right? I am grinning all over myself right now, dear Christine, for your lovely response here!

  14. Christine Moran
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 00:17:15

    🙂 🙂 xx

  15. Thomas Davis
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 02:18:21

    Ethel says this is beautiful. I read it outloud–I wish I could get you a recording of that–
    Scrumbling and tumbling and mumbling and pumbling
    over toe over slow over head over heel
    and song melded with story melded with laughter melded with melding, and the entire universe seemed brighter. Ethel and Tom

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:17:02

      Oh, Thomas, you and Ethel have made me cry with joy at your recital of these lines of mine! So very pleased at how much you seemed to have enjoyed, and benefitted from, these lines!

  16. Savira
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 02:23:09

    Tongue, brain and body twisted with this one. I do like your new word pumbling!I especially like “all tied gether friends did land in fumbling” I have quite th image in my head!!

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:18:54

      Oh, Savira, you have responded to these lines and words better than I had thought possible! You see, by getting your whole body and mind involved, you became for a short time AT ONE with these actions–the perfect “connection.” Wonderful! Many blessings on you, dear Savy!

  17. zumpoems
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 04:54:05

    Thoroughly excellent from the title through the end. The rhythm and irregular meter is amazing! Love the line “saving bird chirp so rasped in hedge” and the next line (iambic pentameter) that follows and serves so well to accentuate the previous syncopation. Great!

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:20:46

      Bless you, Master Poet Zummy! The syncopation is indeed hoped for here to involved the reader in a visceral way in the actions described. This promotes a true “connection”, you see! Hooray for your encouragement and most helpful feedback!

  18. Author of Christian Comfort & Conversation
    Feb 19, 2012 @ 10:27:08

    Granbee, this bird is a busy body. Looks like he is saving everyone but himself. Smiling. I enjoyed. Whats next Granbee? This bird is doing great things or is he?

    • granbee
      Feb 20, 2012 @ 23:22:03

      Yes, Author, this ol’ Ugly Bird is indeed doing great things–and has several tasks upcoming! This bird is so effective BECAUSE he does not worry about saving himself!

  19. eof737
    Feb 20, 2012 @ 13:15:39

    I feel like Ugly Bird… breaking out of the brambles or trying anyway. 😉

  20. Vampire Weather
    Feb 21, 2012 @ 05:01:39

    I will stay tuned! What a way you have with words, my friend! Wonderfully done

    • granbee
      Feb 21, 2012 @ 05:39:08

      VW, you are always so encouraging. Yes, I do enjoy frolicking around with my words! Bless you for your ongoing support and inspiration at your own blog!

  21. bardessdmdenton
    Feb 22, 2012 @ 00:53:51

    The title and verse of your poem is so evocative of life’s dilemmas! Sometimes it is good for us to be entangled in ‘brambles’, to realize that the more we struggle the more we get caught in our own agendas against the greater plan.

    It’s not that we don’t have free will, just that at times we need to carefully unravel from our the misdirection in our lives.

    • granbee
      Feb 22, 2012 @ 01:01:03

      Careful unraveling by that tiny ray of light reflected off that Ugly Bird’s beady eye! Ugliness and beadiness need not always by unhelpful, you know! So very pleased you enjoyed this post. Wonderful feedback and inspiration for further development, dear bardess!

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